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Back to Hogwarts
21 reviewsHarry, Hermione and Luna go back to Hogwarts after taking a short detour. The Horcruxes begin to fall like dominos.
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Achieving Clarity
(#) siaru 2009-05-12
Text appears to be truncated; please reload this so we can see the end of the chapter. I marvel at the aggressively assertive Luna.Achieving Clarity
(#) kayemsi2 2009-05-12
Nice chapter, but the last sentence or two was cut off.
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(#) thekev 2009-05-12
Really Great chapter, I look forward to seeing what you do with the rest of the story.Author's response
Thanx,
I have an outline, but they tend to be advisory in nature. . .
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(#) SpringRaine 2009-05-12
I love the idea of Luna being the Lady Black. I'd love to find out how the chapter ends.Achieving Clarity
(#) Hatecrew 2009-05-12
there seems to be a part of this chapter missing :(
maybe you should try to reupload it ...
other than that i love the story ... its a nice and different take on luna ...
hope to see much more of this ^^Achieving Clarity
(#) Cateagle 2009-05-12
Ah, glad you got the chapter fixed since there was so much more after where it first cut off. 'Twas a most enjoyable chapter and methinks neither Dumbles nor Snape enjoyed their exposure to "Luna on a roll". They most certainly did roll up most of the Horcruxes right quickly and I suspect they managed a few other little ereands on the way. I do like how the relationship 'tween the three of them is growing so nicely and I love the way they've gotten Neville and Pansy together (that has to rankle Draco most considerably). Meanwhile, it should be quite "educational" to see what else Luna is planning.Author's response
Thanx, as always, for reading and reviewing.
It was kind of refreshing to give Dumbles a good ass-chewing by way of our beloved Luna.
And giving Snape a nervous tic, a Luna-tic, is always a good thing. . .
Draco is definately going to try something stupid with the Lord and Lady Longbottom.
I'm imagining Pansy ripping Draco's arm off and beating him about the head and shoulder with it.
As far as what to expect from Luna, why the unexpected, of course.
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(#) JaCeeisme 2009-05-12
Excellent chapter, as always. So glad you got the truncated portion reloaded, as it would have been a pain without it.
Looking forward, as always, for more.Achieving Clarity
(#) Clell65619 2009-05-12
- I never get to rate your stories... even when I start reading the story that hasn't maxed in the ratings, it has by the time I finish...
- Excellent chapter (BTW Molly's family were the Prewett's)
- Bumping into Dung was... convenient, and it was a pleasure to find Goblins that were so... Self servingly cooperative.
- I don't think I've ever seen a Neville/Pansy relationship outside of Neville's abuse of the Slytherin in a Harry/Susan fic that I can't recall the name of just now. The formal discussion between the presumptive 'ladies' was quite entertaining.
- Luna as Lady Black was intriguing. At one point in Acts of Betrayal I was going to use Luna in the Daphne role, but couldn't see her being serious enough for it. You've seen her in a way I've never imagined. Very nice indeed.
- Peter was oddly cooperative as well. I've never been all that clear on the meaning of owing a life debt, but your version seems to have some teeth to them...
- It sounds like Tommy is going to find himself living in interesting times. Looking forward to what you've got coming.Author's response
I find much the same thing reading your stories, by the time I finish a chapter its already maxed out. This is not a bad thing.
Thanx for the heads up on Molly's maiden name, I did fix it in the edit.
True, bumping into Dung was convenient but then again, a very similar hapenstance occured in HBP, if I remember correctly. The difference here is Luna was on hand to hex the miscreant before he apparated away.
Go Luna, go Luna, go Luna!
The concept of Pansy as a strong, caring woman is borrowed heavily from White Knight, Grey Queen. If you haven't read it, it's a good'un.
About the life debt, in my opinion, if you owe someone a life debt then your life is literally in their hands.
Tommy may think he knows what's coming, but he's never come up against the combined might of Harmony raised to the power of Luna.
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(#) JaCeeisme 2009-05-12
A little omake for the gargoyle scene:
The gargoyle blinked, then shook his head and slid out of the way.
"Thank you, Mr. Gargoyle."
"Irving." The stone gutter-spout said.
"Thank you, Irving."
"Don't mention it."
"Oh, don't be like that. I really appreciate it, Irving."
"No, I'm serious. Please, please, don't mention my name. I hate it, and I wanna kick my father's basalt backside all the way back to the quarry for naming me that!"Author's response
Love it,
Hope you don't mind if I add it to the end of this chapter in an edit?
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(#) Aelfwine 2009-05-12
Oh, nice.
I'm glad to see the whole thing, now--was a bit disappointed by the sudden stop.
Hmm, the Patils as Sinhalese... that's a new one. Seems as if all the Sinhalese I've run into or read about in the news had different sorts of names, four or five syllables long, whereas Patil seems more like just a variant on Patel, but I've not known all that many Sinhalese.Author's response
Good point on the Sinhalese names, suffice it to say the surnames are truncated for the benefit of the Anglos.
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