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Harry Potter and the power of Oa
(#) SpringRaine 2009-05-11
I'm so happy Sirius and Remus finally know that Harry is alive and that they've decided not to tell Dumbledore what they've figured out.
As far as authors notes, when the notes are longer then the chapter, then yes, that does annoy me. Short notes that you have are fine with me though.Harry Potter and the power of Oa
(#) NANLIT 2009-05-11
In chapter 15, you had Sirius escape on July 31, yet he arrived at Remus's house on July 30? Also, last chapter, you had Astraea being nearly 4 months old at the end of July yet she was born in early May. That would make her nearly 3 months old at the time. Though I must say after looking at chapter 1 again, you are doing good at fixing your timeline inconsistencies. Good job.
P.S. What was Dudley's fate and when exactly was the invasion that made Harry aware of his Lantern powers? Was it December or January or what?Harry Potter and the power of Oa
(#) bluminous 2009-05-11
like i said in ficwad it's undedited, in ficwad.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4944577/1/Harry_Potter_and_the_power_of_Oa
that's the edited chapters, from 1 - 16. thanks for pointing it out
NANLIT.
hmm you're right, 3 months then if she was born on may 2, her birthday.
Dudley's living with his aunt Marge. December, they were having a christmas party at the watchtower when the thanagarians attacked.Harry Potter and the power of Oa
(#) grim_kos 2009-05-12
i liked the whole part on harry cooking and it was very descriptive i like that. keep it up and good work cant wait for the rest.Harry Potter and the power of Oa
(#) GryffindorDragon 2009-05-17
The development with Trigon is interesting. But after the chapter with Harry and the gods (battling Ares), one wonders why the gods aren't there to defeat such evil.
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