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The Dark Light Within
(#) pi3142 2009-01-12
Could you tone down the swearing? I know you want to put emphasis, but it makes the characters seem OOC when it doesn't need to be.The Dark Light Within
(#) jabarber69 2009-01-12
Hey fuck em your story is good! now he looks like he's gonna be shagging tonks, fluer, daphne, tracy, blaise, hopefully hermione and also hopefully luna....hell this keeps up he'll never get out of bed...the lucky muther!The Dark Light Within
(#) biged78 2009-01-12
In response to AN 4, I ask the question: Is there anything that is NOT cliche anymore in Harry Potter fanficdom? I also agree with jabarber69 and leave you with one of my favorite sayings. Joke'em if they can't take a fuck.The Dark Light Within
(#) Slayer89 2009-01-12
Hi Good chapter And have a good idea about the pairing what about Harry/Fleur/Daphne/Tracey/Blaise and Mathew/TonksThe Dark Light Within
(#) ROBERT_1958 2009-01-12
Why did Hrry not comman the houe to remove everyone but Harry?
When Hary saw Hermione, why i sh just stan thre and do nothig?
Is Hermione controled bey somone?
Why i Harry no check on her?
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(#) DJ32 2009-01-12
I thought it was a good chapter don't be so hard on your self. I think this is a great fic and agree with biged78 "Is there anything that is NOT cliche anymore in Harry Potter fanficdom"? Having said that you come real close to being NOT cliche so keep it up grate work.The Dark Light Within
(#) dougal74 2009-01-12
Another great chapter.
Why don't you give Harry the gift of wnadless magic and use the vampire kid to help with control, that and spell weaving/crafting or a true metamorph...change into any human or animal.
I hope that we get to see Hermione joining Harry and the guys.The Dark Light Within
(#) superharrypotterfan 2009-01-12
good chapter glad to see that you can work around the bond for daphne and tracy keep up the good work
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