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OWL Results
4 reviewsOnce again the title should say it all. If you want more detail: the teens get their OWL results; Harry does a bit of driving and they celebrate their results
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The Dark Light Within
(#) zicou 2008-12-30
Thats a great story so far; so .....
Continuuuuuuuuue!
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(#) lycus 2008-12-31
Hey Hey Hey! wait a minute, Harry thinking of Hermione as a sister is just wrong, And I hope that she does something to change those thoughts, since they are the couple that complement each other the most, And Hermione is one of the only girls that can except Harry and love him the way he is.The Dark Light Within
(#) fubar 2009-01-05
The main problems of your story are your social interactions(dialogs/situations/characterisation). A good guideline would be reading your own story:-) and ask yourself if you would talk that way or if the situations you create feel in any way natural.
Author's response
Thanks for the constructive criticism. It's always nice to be told about how the story can be improved.
Concealed-Convict
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