While this story isn't the best written, it certainly isn't horrible, and it's definitely a new take on a lot of things. My issues with it are more that parts keep getting cut off from the end of each chapter so chunks of the story are missing.
Is this posted elsewhere? Could you email a full copy to me if it isn't?
Keep writing!
Author's response
I agree it isn't the best or well written at this point, but I dare anyone to say the same when it is completely edited (which won't happen until it is completely finished).
I have one back and added the parts which ficwad cut off. I am not sure if I am loading too much per chapter or it is just a fluke.
I am also posted at ff net. I came here and published this story because I keep getting error messages when I try to load new chapters or edit existing chapters. I didn't want to lose the thread of the story while waiting for ff net to get back to me. So far I have been waiting 8 days, I figured I had read more than my share of decent stories on ficwad and the audience may be different over here.
Feel free to continue reading and critiquing what I have posted. Thank you for your time and efforts in reading what my ideas.