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The Loss Of My Syblings Of Sithis

It's a short story I guess on how I think my character felt when she recieved her contract to kill her brothers and sisters of Sithis.

Category: Elder Scrolls 4: Oblivion - Rating: G - Genres: Drama - Characters:  - Published: 2007/03/13 - Updated: 2007/03/13 - 802 words

Reviews

• The Loss Of My Syblings Of Sithis

  (#) Lourdes 2007-03-21 07:51:18 PM

  Cassie! You published it. Excellent! If you want to come over to use my book you know all you have to do is call. ^_^

• The Loss Of My Syblings Of Sithis

  (#) MelissaJ 2007-05-03 04:26:10 PM

  I enjoyed this short story. I found it quite original and interesting, however, you have several errors in grammar. Some words that should not be capitalized are, and some words are not spaced apart. Also, your sentences are very choppy and short. Using a comma or semicolon occasionally benefit you greatly. All in all, you are not a bad writer, there are just a few things you need to work on. You've got a good head for ambiance and detail, and now there are just the kinks to work out. :)

  Author's response

  thank you that was very helpful. I'll probably have to ask my boyfriends aunt what some of that means. And what and where I should put the commas and stuff. because unfortunatly I don't remember learning much of that in some of the schools I went to. And now they kind of just expect us to know what we're doing. But Thank you Very much :D

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