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Who Likes Me?! and Trouble on the Field!!
22 ReviewsAtlanta discovers Archie's not so little secret, and Felicity's a bitch.
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(#) iheartyou07 2006-08-08 07:22:25 PM
This is probably you're best chapter. God, I couldn't stop laughing through the whole thing!! Glad you updated, and hope you update soon again please! Jay and Theresa are just too cute, and Felicity is just a bitch. Can't wait to see her get her ass kicked! -
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(#) Demenior 2006-08-08 07:36:12 PM
Another wonderful chapter! I loved this one- thanks to the comments about Arhcie and Jay being hotties and Archie and Atlanta finally getting 'matchmade' by Jay and Theresa.
I'm sorry I haven't reviewed before- I admit it, I was lazy. But I'll try not to from now on, I'll be an active reviewer ;D
Oh dear, poor Atlanta. Maybe Arhcie could help her in the 'battle' against Felicity- not sure how but maybe embarassing Felicity a lot by, I dunno, kissing Atlanta in front of her or something? Except that's a little out-of-character for both of them, since they're both 'new' to their relationship.
I love the fact that the boys have sprouted (I'm suffering form this confusion right now as well- my belief is that there's something in the water back in my old town. I used to be fairly tall just a year ago and now, among them, I'm a shrimp)
The way you're portraying Theresa's character is... interesting. Don't get the impression that I don't like- I just think I have to get used to it.
Your dialogue is very nice as well. I for one, am terrible with character interaction and joking around and such. You do it quite well.
Their last names- more crative than my versions (haven't yet used them- but once I get my, as I like to call it, VERY loosly Phantom of the Opera-based fanfiction up (and if you read it) you'll see what I mean) I like the irony in Arhcie's last name too, quite funny.
Not much I can add for critiquing, other than the fact of Theresa's character- but that's how you've chosen to portray her, so I won't argue with that ;)
Althgouh, another thing I must say I love about your writing is the fact that you make things REAL. I just don't seem to be able to do that- but you have real-life scenarios, relationships and couple-moments. I think that has got to be my most favorite thing about your writing.
Awesome job, and I hope you update soon, please!
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(#) TORCH 2006-08-08 08:07:48 PM
I've met a person like this Felicity bitch (pardon the swear) and I hope she gets her butt handed to her in the next chapter. -
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(#) Jessi_Girl9 2006-08-08 08:18:19 PM
wow, this chapter is AWESOME, it's so hott, and i hope the next chapter comes out soon! -
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(#) Amanda!!! 2006-08-08 08:40:59 PM
omg i luv it and i hope that you can review really soon because if you dont i think that i will die!!!! i luv how evily akward it is when you maka falicity flirt with like jay or archie cause it gets the girls even madder! ilove the girl fights!is there any chance that the next chappy could be up in the next few days?? o'ya and i cant believe how long that chappy was! you know all your chapters dont have to be like super long or somethig!not that i mind... any way great story update soon!! -
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(#) princessofoyownworld 2006-08-09 03:34:42 PM
I loved this chapter! It was amazing! You have to update soon! Please?
*Gummy Bears take keyboard*
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(#) EilayAdnayVolieay 2006-08-10 06:12:06 PM
Aww! I decided to review this story here at ficwad instead of ff.net since I was on this site at the moment. shrugs But anyways, I thought this chapter was EXTREMELY cute, just... all of it. Funny, cute, adorable...
I loved the bathroom scene. I love Atlanta's reaction to Archie's feelings for her, and I loved the way Archie reacted when he realized Theresa had told Atlanta. Felicity teasing Atlanta, and Atlanta actually showing a weakness, emotionally, was good. Tough girls, aren't always so tough. Just all of this, it was in-character with a bit more of a mature take on the show we love :) That is, swearing and dissing people--- go Theresa!
Awesome chapter, AMAZING story thus far--- update as soon as you get the chance.
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(#) Jessi_Girl9 2006-08-14 09:32:42 AM
hey, i just really loved your story, and yes, i have reviewed already, i was just wondering when the next chatper comes out...Author's response
hey, thanks so much, I'm glad you like it. Not sure about the next update, I work every single day (damn expensive tuition)plus I've got a bit of writer's block. Gah! Such a bad combo. Hopefully within the next week I'll be updating either this one or A New Twist. Or both. We'll see if I get inspiration, lol. -
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(#) dancechickie222 2006-08-18 06:42:19 AM
I thought it was a wonderful story! youreally have a talent and hope you write more. this was my favourite chapter.