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A Broken Heart
12 ReviewsThanks to the helpful people who reviewed my fanfic, I've added some changes. Yet, this story still needs work... can you guys help me out, and tell me what I can add/change/take away, please? Th...
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(#) torch 2006-06-10 05:59:41 PM
could you write somewhere how atalnta was captured? if not oh well. keep going with this story. -
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(#) caity_party_princess 2006-06-10 08:33:00 PM
I'm going to have to say the same could you maybe explain how Atlanta was taken? -
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(#) Arisey 2006-06-11 09:31:26 AM
It was okay, but you should have made it atleast a bit longer. Also, you could've explained how Atlanta had been captured.Author's response
Ok... I've added to the story, and I tried to sort of say how Atlanta was captured, but I also wanted the reader to decide what they think... Is that ok?
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(#) princessofoyownworld 2006-06-11 12:08:05 PM
Ohh, are you going to continiue this? I hope so, its REALLY good so far. Dont be so hard on yor self.Author's response
Sheepish grin Thanks... =) Yes, I think I'll continue this, but I'm not quite sure how to add to it... Anyways, it's exam week for me, so I'll have to finish after exams... -
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(#) artemia-the-huntress 2006-06-18 08:27:58 PM
you HAVE to continue! it's great so far, plz update!!! -
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(#) S.J. 2006-06-26 04:32:00 AM
hey, I liked the image you gave them both. It was a story you had to keep reading, but you didn't make it too dramatic like a lot of other stories I've read. Your grammar was amazing which is something I like! I think you should watch your character outline, which is just a fancy way of saying, watch how you put each charater in each situation. Also, try to watch that you don't drag out the plot or chapter. (If you're wondering why I'm being so picky, it's because I have awards in short story writing and novel writing, so I thought this advice would help!) Over all plot wise, it was really good, beleive me, I've proof-read a lot of short stories in my day, and this one did impress me. I too am a fan of Class of the Titans!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thanx -
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(#) sea glass 2006-07-07 10:27:37 PM
so great..... please update ..
because i will get mad if you don't
teehee teehhe =)) really good so far