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Obsession

Who is Rockstar Joey Wheeler's obsession?

Category: Yu-Gi-Oh! - Rating: PG-13 - Genres: Humor, Romance - Characters: Joey Wheeler, Seto Kaiba - Published: 2006/03/07 - Updated: 2006/03/07 - 1219 words - Complete

Reviews

• Obsession

  (#) Seto and Joey forever 2006-04-06 06:22:05 PM

  It's a great story.Write more please!!!!!!!!!!!

• Obsession

  (#) YOU SUCK 2006-05-09 07:50:22 AM

  GODAMN, THE STORY SUCKS BIG FAT HAIRY MONKEY BALLS !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!YOU MUST BE THE GAYEST BITCH INTHE WORLD SO F@#$@#$^#$#%%$&^$%^&$$%#.

• Obsession

  (#) hisui_86 2007-11-29 03:30:29 PM

  This was so cool! I LOVE IT!
  Bad Luck appearance was so sweet ^^
  Keep on writing plz!!!

• Obsession

  (#) darkokita 2008-05-24 10:51:33 AM

  There are a few problems with your spelling. If you can't get spellcheck than maybe you could get a beta-reader. Also, these two sentences;
  
  "Fine, but just for the video." He growled out.
  
  Kaiba took a deep breath, them screamed out...
  
  The words 'growled' and 'screamed' are both active/descriptive verbs in their own right. It isn't necessary (and is, in fact, grammatically incorrect) to add the word 'out' after them.
  
  I do like the story, though. Animotion's 'Obsession' is one of my favorite songs and I like the images you used for the 'video'. I can just see Kaiba going ballistic, too. LOL
  
  
  

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