Hehe, I really like this story! I'm putting it on my favourite list! You're excellent at writing, y'know. If it's one thing I can't stand, it's stories with no decent punctuation, spelling or a rubbish story all together, but this is the complete oposite! It's got great punctuation and spelling, and I could read it all day! I love it!!!
Author's response
Thank you! I try. I've been called a Grammar Nazi because I edit things like there's no tomorrow. I fix my English teacher's mistakes.