the oddness of the laqnguage is interesting and curious, and I will not criticize the writer for that at all. looking at the words ,the intent is understood, and it is a good exercise in writing and learning. I do like the ideas and concepts here, there are some here that I have not seen before and as such, has been an enjoyable story to read. Not bad for a first story.
Author's response
Thank you. I appreciate your kind words.