intersting story...but it kinda of threw me at first that is until I figured out that you went into a flashback right at the first of the story... also your style of writing threw me off at first as well, not that there was anything wrong with it your style I mean, it just kinda threw me...I know your confused arent you!, so am I, I now cant figure out what I was trying to say in the first place...
Oh well on to the review: Interesting ideal, about the matrix...although I wish you would everyone once in awhile use a flashback and describe a little bit of his training to learn the matrix thing in the vault!
Also love the flirting and the noticing of the girls around him, he needs to desperately get laid!!!!
Kinda of confuse though that he gave a copy of his mums work to a stranger!?!
Oh and I live Hedwig and what you have done to her as well as Dobby!