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5 ReviewsSomething I came up with during language class.
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(#) hermitrisin 2008-06-09 02:43:50 AM
what i liked about this was the geniune tone and the effective use of refrain. however there were parts that didn't flow as well as they could have, for example the second to last stanza.
on the whole though, this is a very well expressed poem.Author's response
Yeah.......
I'm good at writing depressing stuff, but I still have some work to do to improve myself. -
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(#) flying_angel 2008-06-13 09:37:43 AM
i really liked this poem. The swirl of emotions put into it is amazing. I like to surround myself with literature, especially poetry, and this is a very beautifully hand-crafted poem. don't stop writing! -
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(#) Lororie 2008-06-16 12:02:40 PM
Very nice wording - you have an impressive writing voice. You are very good at showing your readers exactly what you want them to see. You should try broadening your genres! I also really liked "Dissection" - I hate biology, lol! -
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(#) Strawberrykitsune 2008-06-16 04:32:13 PM
really nice!
all of the emotions all budled up in one, that was a cool idea,! -
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(#) MarkPoa 2008-06-17 07:46:39 PM
I think this poem's best strength is the use of simple, strong, straightforward language. It suitably conveys the strength of the speaker's convictions and hate. Good job!