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Magic Evolved
18 ReviewsAU. Crossover fic. Magic is on the brink of evolution. One person stands at the heart of a world in conflict, and only he has the power to bring it to an end. [Full Summary in Profile]
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(#) spedclass 2008-07-05 10:23:19 AM
Awesome chapter keep up the good work and update soon!Author's response
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(#) Chunky 2008-07-05 02:38:18 PM
Careful there. Happen to know about a story with almost the exact same content. Might want to re-check your motivation if posting this NOW would be a good idea.
Dunno if you picked it up from them or not, but if you did, I must kindly ask you to STOP POSTING, as Bob'n Alyx are a little... violent(?)... when it comes to their storys. They might not appreciate this.
Not a thread, mind you. Just a warning. Wouldn't want you to be banned because you didn't know or anything.
--ChunkyAuthor's response
This story is like another? Ha. I didn’t intend for that to happen. If Bob’n Alyx has issues with my story then let them talk to me. Everything I wrote came from my head. The ideas may have been borrowed here and there from other stories, but their so general I don’t think it would matter one way or the other. For instance, how Draco became the Black heir. That came about because I’m tired of authors screwing Draco out of his loot. I don’t like him but they can’t just give Harry the Black fortune because he wants it! Harry’s going to have to work for everything he gets in this story! -
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(#) ALConfederate 2008-07-05 03:24:37 PM
Hey, Chunky -- what story might that be? I'm fairly familiar with Bob & Alyx's stuff myself, and this isn't close at all to any of their stuff.
Tacitus, I like what I see so far, but I do hope you're going to give us a little background soon...Author's response
It'll come eventually. I’m still against the wall on whether or not I should have him explain it himself how he learned to do what he does, or to just have flashbacks. Incidentally, I hate flashbacks with a passion. :) -
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(#) Draconia20 2008-07-05 04:21:48 PM
Really good start of the story. A good first chapter, continue the way of writing. :)Author's response
It's the only way I how to right! But don't worry; I'm not the type who would half-ass write a story. I'll spell-check and rewrite as much as I can but there’s guaranteed to be a few mistakes that’ll slip by regardless. Expect those types of things until a get a few betas. -
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(#) Cateagle 2008-07-05 11:51:36 PM
The only commonality with Bob & Alyx's "Mutant Storm" is that Jean Grey is a relative of of Lily Evans Potter (and, even at that, the exact relationship is a bit different and in this case Petunia knows of the relationship); the rest of this story is already developing along distinctly different lines. It might be worth pointing to their story and, also, talking with them to ensure that everything's cool, there.
I rather enjoyed this first chapter and look forward to see more, esp. as more of the backstory gets fleshed out for the readers.Author's response
I can't find this story you guys are talking about. Bob & Alyx (and any other authors) are going to have to suck it up. Their crossover stories aren’t the only fics on the block anymore!
I never read any Harry Potter and X-Men crossover fics before. That's my core motivation in writing story. I love both movie cannons and thought they could meld well together, if done right. I guess all I can say is great minds think alike! -
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(#) jabarber69 2008-07-06 03:20:35 AM
Hey this is really, really good! Every time I thought I had this story figured out, you would change the direction... first finding out he is related to jean grey (x-men) then find out the death eaters and voldie is alive and they thought he had been a squib due to defeating voldie, but whats this about the potters still being alive or is that also part of the fake story told to the deatheaters!?!Author's response
Thanks. Hopefully you'll be singing the same tune about 10 champers for now. It's still entirely too early to tell how good or bad this will be. Let's hope I don't choke midway through, eh? -
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(#) dareycow 2008-07-06 05:10:34 AM
Hey love this story already. From looks at your rating you might have some smut, but if you do please only make it a minor focus. I don't like soft porn in stories unless it actually adds to the story.
Either way I'll keep on reading it :D
From the fact that Harry can apparate within anti-apparation wards and you mentioning you want Harry to be able to actually work for his power, I take it Harry is mutant (most-likely since its xmen crossover) and he has teleport abilities?Author's response
Yes, there will be a modest amount of smut scattered throughout the story. The NC-17 rating is more of an insurance policy on my part. If I ever decide to flesh out future smut then I’d post the more graphic bits here instead of FF.net because of their stiff rating system.
With all the powerful men and women in this story I'd say it’s quite unavoidable that most will have a few passionate moments. We all know how much the magical world, with their 18th century-like government, considers sexual relations and bloodlines of the utmost importance.
I won't reveal much about Harry’s 'apparation' at this point. All will be revealed given time. -
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(#) bop 2008-07-06 06:04:53 PM
A very intersting story.
A good test I've developed for deciding whether or not to continue reading a fic is to see if I'm willing to ignore errors in spelling and grammar and just concentrate on the story alone. This story more than passes.
It is a gem that only needs a bit more of polish to truly shine. For a first story it is rather well written, thought-out and compelling. Please take the time to continue this story; I will be looking forward to more.
On the subject of Bobmin's "Mutant Storm" (found incidentally on fanficauthors.net), I agree with Cateagle that these 2 stories are already differently directed in their apparent plotlines. I think that though there might easily come a rash of "Jean Grey is Lilly Evans' sister" stories, being among the first still gains some points for originality.
Please keep writing.... And stay safe on your tour with the US Navy.Author's response
Thanks for the review.
I have very OCD type moments. It seems no matter how times I try to edit/fix small spelling, grammar, and minor inconsistencies, there’s always more. The chapter that’s up now was like my 6th draft and I get peeved when I read through it and still find mistakes. So my solution is getting a few betas that’ll point out the few flaws that are not obvious to me the first and tenth time around.
I’m my own worst critic. I’d flame myself it was possible. lol -
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(#) TxA_GunFighter 2008-07-06 11:01:03 PM
Very interesting start.
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Lets hope I can stay consistant. -
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(#) Dragen 2008-07-07 04:09:32 AM
Great and interesting start mate, I can't wait to se what you have planed next. I've read your Summary in your Profile and I hope to see Harry/Hermione/Kitty as I like a good threesome - lol. I also think it would be a great pairing.
I like Harry's way of thinking that he got his skills from his parents, as in the books he didn't think of this.
I like how Harry trained himself with his powers before starting Hogwarts, I do like these kind of story. One of the powers I like in this story, is that Harry can see what other people are thinking. I like how he used to use this skill on his aunt to find out about his parents - nicely done mate.
Oh I like how Harry is related to Jean Grey, nicely done how you added one of the x-men.
I like how Harry used his ‘mind walking', I like Harry's training and what he can do.
Vernon the bastard, throwing Harry out like that.
I wonder why the Death Eaters thought that Harry was a squib?? How did Vodlemort got his body, I think you need to do a Prologue, to explain how Voldy got his body back and how the Death Eaters thought that Harry was a squib.Author's response
Someone has to give ol' Charles and Magneto a run for their money, eh? Not to mention what Harry will have to put up with in the magical world.