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• The Detour to Reality

  (#) daled73 2008-10-03

  Where is the 9/29 update shown?
  
  No new CHapters (seven is the last) and none show edited 9/29?????

  Author's response

  The latest update is a proof-read version of chapter 1 (revision 3) and correction of a spelling error. Chapter 8 is half way through the beta process.
  
  I hope to post the new chapter in the next few days once I have got it back from my betas.
  
  Regards
  
  Lancelot47

• The Detour to Reality

  (#) desertcoyote 2008-10-26

  I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed this story and hope to see some new chapters in the future!

  Author's response

  Their will be more but progress is slow as the muse is fighting me at present.
  
  Thanks for the review.

• The Detour to Reality

  (#) TenshiShouten 2009-01-29

  I will give you my honest opinion, while plot is good, it doesn't click with me, I just started reading it to chapter four and what you did with Susan Bones(One Of My Top Favorite Harry Potter Characters) simply just turned me off of this story.
  
  This is not flame, just only my opinion and my opinion alone.
  
  Good day and good luck.

  Author's response

  Hello TenshiShouten.
  
  Thanks for expressing your opinion.
  I am sorry that the plot direction did nothing for you.
  I did not set out to bash any character in particular or specifically Susan.
  The muse suggested Susan due to her relationship to Amilea who features in the plot in the future.
  I understand where you are coming from and I am sorry if the plot direction offended you.
  
  Thanks for taking the time to share your views.
  
  Regards
  Lancelot47

• The Detour to Reality

  (#) Psaid 2009-02-09

  I like the Idea for the story, with the whole Harry somehow get's transported to a would where he's fiction, but fore me it would have worked better if the story only became AU after the travel between the realities, without all the changes in the first books that you have made.
  Off cause that would probably have made it hard to make it a HHr ship.
  You should probably go over chapter one at some point and see if you can't make the change of viewpoint more smooth, since it can be quite confusing.
  Again, I like the idea, but sadly not all the changes you choose to make, so I will not be following to the end, but good luck with the story anyway.
  (Just to make sure I'm not misunderstood, this is not meant to be a flame so I hope it doesn't come over as one)

• The Detour to Reality

  (#) Cereal_junkie 2009-02-19

  Dude. I read the rest of the chapters so far, and I loved it. Not liked; loved dude. You took the story out of the author's hands and ran with it, and you did a fantastic job if I do say so myself. I can't wait to read more. ^.^

  Author's response

  Dude,
  Thanks for the review. :)
  Next chapter is 2/3rds done along with a new fic, watch this space. :p
  Later
  Lancelot47

• The Detour to Reality

  (#) thegreyone 2009-09-03

  Have truly enjoyed the Reality Detour.
  The Real World adventures are honestly one of the very best fanfiction works of art I have seen, and to me is the true hilight of this fiction.
  May I suggest that if your creativity is running into difficulties, that you simplify the story somewhat. eg eliminate Draco and old evil mage, Squash DD and his cronies, fade the vampire clans, and remove lots of gold from the goblins when H/Hr retreat after being attacked by them.
  The storms could be the disturbances from portals to the past being opened (by LV), or the time period coming to a close. I assure you that you still have plenty ongoing for your main theme - H/Hr and family with the new and different magics. Even return to the Real World with their family after LV is defeated. If ideas are still troubling, do a quick eliminate of LV, and write of a return to RW and setting up IDs and careers. This has to add to the 'Not Been Done Before'.
  To conclude, it has not been my intention to criticize, so my apologies.
  I repeat that the Reality Detour where our heroes matured is the best.
  
  Cheers.
  

• The Detour to Reality

  (#) Godogma 2009-09-28

  You have too many plot lines in this story to really cover any of them well. This relegates you to constantly jump around between characters and not focus in any one case too much.
  
  In the beginning you also suffered with a great deal of telling the reader what was happening instead of showing us what was going on.
  
  Second, you have strange happenings that might make sense to you as an author going on that the reader is given no hints about even vaguely going on - you have people who can mystically get the information from a book that purges itself after five entries....
  
  Then we get to the furthest I've read - the issue with Hermione's mom going into shock and neither Harry or Hermione noticing at all is frankly ludicrous. Also you have them becoming exhausted after using very little magic in their world when they were doing much more in a day in "Reality".
  
  The most important thing an author has to remember is internal consistency. Rowling fouled that up for three books, if someone didn't ghost write the last three with her notes helping them.
  
  Unfortunately, it seems you've done the same thing. Harry and Hermione did several feats of magic in the real world that they seemingly couldn't accomplish in their own world saturated with magic.
  
  Finally, you've got a man who was seemingly not intelligent enough to brew high end potions doing a ritual that caused all of Britain's potions to foul up... Thoroughly unbelievable.
  
  This isn't intended as a flame, rather I'm hoping you'll improve your work. It began interestingly enough, although the "Dorothy" moment was a poor way of moving them between dimensions.
  
  Unfortunately your latter chapters became much less interesting.

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